Let's see how long it should be.
You have 250 words. You ONLY need 25-35 words. 2 sentences. done.
Writing task 2 :
Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games.
What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?
A large number of people, both adults and children, are using computer on daily basis. This kind of reliance on technology affects the younger age group specifically those who like to play games in computer. This essay will discuss about the detrimental effects of computer games played by children, as well as give viable solutions to these problems.
OK> So, firstly, this question asks about children, not adults.
Second sentence doesn't do anything but parrot the intro.
The thesis is right, but you can add what the actual effects and solutions are.
I would do this.
ALMOST EVERY CHILD IN THE DEVELOPED WORLD USES COMPUTERS ON A DAILY BASIS. THIS OFTEN LEADS TO LACK OF SOCIAL AWARENESS AND OBESITY. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THESE ISSUES AND SUGGEST THAT PARENTS SHOULD LIMIT CHILDREN'S ACCESS AND TIME WHILE SCHOOLS SHOULD BAN THE USE OF SMARTPHONES.
See how that is better?
Bit of back referencing there for your grammar mark too!
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